Mr. B. A. Mazurowski
Personal Narative Essay
My friend and his girl had just received the Wonderous Blessing of a
Baby Girl. Also they were the proud recipients of a gift for said blessing, a Doberman Puppy - Josie. They were both very happy with this yet, when the puppy started to grow she would lick the baby's fingers, this was not to the mothers liking, because of her thoughts of a Doberman devowering her child. She had many an unpleasent thought.
They all came by my house one Saturday morning - my house was on the Lake in New Hampshire. At the time I was about 18 and I had two kids - Ricky, Tina, and
" My Old Lady ". Thier request was that I would watch the puppy for a given time. As it turned out we had become the new owners of the puppy. She was quite a handful, the hardest part was to teach the children not to feed or water the puppy, as I would be the only contact that she could have. I had set a very rigid and strick regimen for said puppy.
When she came of age to get her shots we walked into town to the Vet. , She was
a very well mannered puppy, she could be left and would not move until the command was given, she could sit , stand , lay down, stay , heal , retreive , and swim. She was not allowed food unless it was I that fed her. Coming of age she got loose one day and was gone for almost a week. Upon return she was dirty and sore. A few weeks later we found out she was to become a " Mommy ". All the care she was to be given came from my girl and the kids as her regimen had been given some slack. Still the " Mailman " would only deliver the mail on Saturday mornings when I was home.
Josie became the very " Loud and Proud Bitch " of twelve mixed bred, Doberman and German Shepherd pups. She would diligently care for her litter and was very protective of them. My girl was not to happy when the pups started taking over the house, she would constantly plead with me to find homes for them. My search for good homes was not very difficult as at the time I had a very large brotherhood. We would help each other with whatever had to be done, downing trees, chopping wood for the winter, painting, roofing, the maintenance of the motocycles and cars/trucks, there was not a project we could not handle. All work was done at no charge, theese projects were all done on weekends as everyone had full-time jobs a house and family. You could say life was ideal, it was still a small town and eveybody knew each other.
As the story goes, all is not well that does not end well. When " Josie " surrendered her last offspring she was not long for this " Great Earth ", She passed in the night and we layed her to rest in " The Garden by The Lake ".
Lookimg back when I received Josie, my girl was upset that I payed way to much attention to the dog, I tried to explain that in order for her to become the best she could, she had to have but one authority that being I . There is no substitution for a strick regimen. They must learn properly, although it sounds cruel in the end, nothing else matters but the authority and relationship between the two. We would argue over stupid things, like time spent working to make money to get the things she wanted. After one of our more explosive arguements, I had taken Josie with me to the great " City of New York " so as my girl could have some time to collect her thoughts on our relationship, she had wanted her Dad to move in with us as he was retiring, and was on a fixed income, I mostly agreed, yet there were some ground rules, He was not allowed to touch the children as that was to be thier mothers and mine to decide the degree of said acts.
When we arrived in the city it was late at night. We tried to get on the subway but the man there said they would not allow the dog without a leash, I tried to explain that she was a good dog and quite friendly - She was red and black with a short tail and long ears. Her size was large and people miss took her as being aggressive.
As we walked the entire length of Manhattan, we met several people most were friendly, some were not. One girl in Spanish Harlem yelled across the street, " Hey ! ! ! why don't you feed that dog ? My reply was " Come across the street and feed her yourself " She just laughed and we went on our way down the road.
We finallt get to my younger brothers apartment in the early A.M. The apartment had double doors so we had to wait for his return. I sat up on the floor with Josie by my side, I drifted off to sleep and when I awoke Josie was in attack mode, being very ferocious and as protective as she had ever been, at my command she sat - yet she remained at full alert. The person at the door was my brothers room-mate. It was quite a first impression. We did not stay long, just a couple of days, then we hit the road Hitch-Hiking back to New Hampshire and
" The Family "
In conclusion, I would definitely say :
" Josie was one of the most precious gifts ever given to this world ".
She was at all times tremendously protective of The Children , My Girl ,
and most assuredly " One's Master ".
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My favorite thing about this story was ….his friend and his friends girl got a puppy which was a blessing to them
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giving great detail about the puppy and how life was living with the new member of their house
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